tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post114044989791504071..comments2023-11-05T09:52:04.030+00:00Comments on My other Shoes are Manolos: DialogueThe ramblings of a shoe fiendhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02193183543700543479noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post-1140862668896591602006-02-25T10:17:00.000+00:002006-02-25T10:17:00.000+00:00hmm.. been a long time since i read any blogs... !...hmm.. been a long time since i read any blogs... !! was worth coming back to itAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01293370071459548153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post-1140610916173112542006-02-22T12:21:00.000+00:002006-02-22T12:21:00.000+00:00Well, I loved it! This was such a darling piece :)...Well, I loved it! This was such a darling piece :)<BR/><BR/>Now <B>this</B> look, I've made up my mind.. It's damn neat :DAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post-1140605613782934102006-02-22T10:53:00.000+00:002006-02-22T10:53:00.000+00:00Hmm...Somehow the funny lines and the clever comeb...Hmm...<BR/>Somehow the funny lines and the clever comebacks seem scripted. And lack the natural flow of two people conversing at 7.00 am on an ordinary Wednesday morning. May be that's not the point. May be the point is that it has to be dramatic. Somehow, I cannot help thinking that this is not one of your best pieces.ammanihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09002764562048409240noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post-1140543152314177112006-02-21T17:32:00.000+00:002006-02-21T17:32:00.000+00:00J.A.P - So does my husband :)Keya - If only every...J.A.P - So does my husband :)<BR/><BR/>Keya - If only everyone were as lucky as you!<BR/><BR/>Minal - Thanks. You're not the only one.. guess it needs some more work.<BR/><BR/>C not O - Thanks!The ramblings of a shoe fiendhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02193183543700543479noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post-1140538937050808892006-02-21T16:22:00.000+00:002006-02-21T16:22:00.000+00:00superrrrrrrr....wish i was taking these classes wi...superrrrrrrr....<BR/>wish i was taking these classes wid u...lolz..<BR/>i badly need em..<BR/>hugs..Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post-1140524902382081142006-02-21T12:28:00.000+00:002006-02-21T12:28:00.000+00:00Neat Stuff. however I didn't see 'misunderstanding...Neat Stuff. however I didn't see 'misunderstandings' anywhere.<BR/><BR/>But looks like you are doing really well at your creative writing class!Minalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08556930930046840091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post-1140523543367010862006-02-21T12:05:00.000+00:002006-02-21T12:05:00.000+00:00Ok, I don't want to comment on the creative writin...Ok, I don't want to comment on the creative writing part right now. I just wanted to know if you spied on me!! That WAS my life few years ago!! Fortunately - not anymore :-)Zette Remihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08032281359508823551noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post-1140522576857063552006-02-21T11:49:00.000+00:002006-02-21T11:49:00.000+00:00Not as good as the earlier ones. (Perhaps my sub-c...Not as good as the earlier ones. (Perhaps my sub-conscious resents your intrusion upon the most sacred moments of the morning)<BR/><BR/>J.A.P.J. Alfred Prufrockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16446127543417759542noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post-1140520413764772922006-02-21T11:13:00.000+00:002006-02-21T11:13:00.000+00:00Anon 1 - This was very much a first draft and your...Anon 1 - This was very much a first draft and your feedback will def. help<BR/><BR/>Anon 2 and Because of B - Thanks<BR/><BR/>Falstaff - You're right - I do need to make the dialogue strong enough so it works just as well without the inbetween prose. ThanksThe ramblings of a shoe fiendhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02193183543700543479noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post-1140479961582752452006-02-20T23:59:00.000+00:002006-02-20T23:59:00.000+00:00Shoe-fiend: I don't know. I think the piece works ...Shoe-fiend: I don't know. I think the piece works reasonably well per se and I liked it, but I can't help thinking you're not doing justice to the first part of the assignment. I think it works well with the prose in between but if you were to make this into a script without the other stuff I'm not sure it would be anywhere near as effective. Specifically, I'm not sure that the teasing tone of the latter half quite comes through if you take out the prose - I think you may want to sharpen that tone - he could certainly have more fun at her expense, and that would make the dialogue do more of the work. Just a thought.Falstaffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09791162324919462038noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post-1140464607839079342006-02-20T19:43:00.000+00:002006-02-20T19:43:00.000+00:00i love the bg image!i love the bg image!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post-1140457967646931782006-02-20T17:52:00.000+00:002006-02-20T17:52:00.000+00:00The new format with the change in colour and desig...The new format with the change in colour and design is gorgeous and veeeery cooooool!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10014156.post-1140457735795976402006-02-20T17:48:00.000+00:002006-02-20T17:48:00.000+00:00I dont see the misunderstanding and differing pers...I dont see the misunderstanding and differing perspective parts.<BR/><BR/>Stage 2 of the assignment is supposed to have all those details??What about those?<BR/><BR/>Otherwise racy and entertaining!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com