Monday, January 02, 2006


What will the critics say?

‘Light as air?’

‘Heart achingly delicate?’

‘The empty spaces speak volumes?’

‘The curves of the piece glide effortlessly?’

The milk boils over

Forming an ephemeral sculpture

Of light, delicate, empty bubbles

Framed by the microwave window

What will the critics say?

P.S Happy new year everyone!


TomCruiseChellum said...

Poetry has been getting ever more complicated (in all languages)since I left school with lines like "They flash upon the inward eye which is the bliss of solitude.."; "God is in his heaven and all is well with the world" etc.
As for critics and criticisms, the most commonly used line goes something like this " good in patches", particularly when the music critic of the Hindu wants to make everyone feel happy.
Or is this not poetry at all?
Pl get a good old milk cooker from Saravana Stores when you are in Chennai next. You will have the same art with the externatlity of whistle

apu said...

The critics will ponder over how the ephemerality of the bubbles represents the transience of life....and applaud the wisdom and inner eye of the *artist* :))

Mali&Madhu said...

I believe the most appropriate one should be: If you lament over wasted time and effort, you really are crying over spilt milk. On the other hand, if you lament and cry, that too belting out great big acidic drops of the essence of lacrimae, then you will be crying over split milk. Needless to say, if you blubber and froth it will be spitl milk too. I could go on about how saffron really is the pistil of some orchid, but that would be stipl'ing the joke too far ...

Shyam said...

Might critics say "Argh, I hate it when poetry has to be cleaned up after"? :)

The ramblings of a shoe fiend said...

TCC - Whether this is poetry or not is up to you! And yes, I think a nice, shiny milk cooker is in order!

apu - :) thank you (and those are very good critic-ish words may i add)

m&ms - I think you know that I don;t cry and only blub - though some people have been known to stop the blubbing by sticking bits of appalam in their mouth and pretending to be a papad dracula

shyam - the critics may!

Some Charlie said...

Ur the second blogging copywriter I've discovered while waiting (for 2+ hrs) for my art director to decide which justification to use. Had a few good laughs going through your posts!!

Sue said...

Happy New Year to you too! :)

Arun said...

Who cares about what the critics say as long as you keep writing / creating.

The ramblings of a shoe fiend said...

some charlie - thanks! i hope you're still not waiting for that justification to be chosen - it's a wait in vain i assure you

sue - thanks!

arun - true! but a few favourable reviews never hurt anyone :)

thennavan said...

Happy 2006 SF :-)

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